Got a little poetic these past few weeks, figured I'd throw it up here and see what people think. It's structured like a song, though I have no idea what the tune would be atm. And I'm not entirely sure that the poem/song is complete, there are a couple sections I'm thinking I want to add another stanza or two. But here it is currently:
Days of sunshine and nights of rain,
We had a joyous start.
We shared our warmth on that old train,
We grew within the heart.
Inside, outside, for all to see,
The games we used to play.
Our love forever, eternity,
That’s what we used to say.
Splashes of color, side of the road,
The times we used to share.
Fleeting moments, in our abode,
The times we used to care.
The times we held our hands,
The times we crossed the lands,
The times we danced into the night.
The times we shared together,
In our eyes forever,
We held each other tight.
Sunshine moments are hard to find,
And still there is the pain.
We fight and hide it, the daily grind,
But there is never pain.
Winter arise and the cold sets in,
We snuggle up in bed.
Keeping at bay the gale force winds,
We cannot stay ahead.
For good and bad, that is our bind,
The flakes are falling down.
Deceit and lies leave us behind,
The cold and frozen ground.
The times we held our hands,
The times we crossed the lands,
The times we danced into the night.
The times we shared together,
In our eyes forever,
We held each other tight.
Never long enough,
Always deserved more love,
These times we could ignite.
Our world of glass,
Kicked in the ass,
Left us too fast,
Thrown to the ground.
Our world was jarred,
A shattered shard,
The cut was hard,
The drowning sound.
The misery,
The tainted dreams,
No hope to see,
No one around.
Pick up the pieces and throw them away,
It’s time to start anew.
Dawn breaks through, a brand new day,
We have a better view.
It’s not so deep now, the path ahead,
The snow I have to clear.
The break from winter, our old lives dead,
Spring birds we soon will hear.
A new warmth from our glorious dawn,
Chases away the pain.
Looking back, the shadow is gone,
Our love we will obtain.
The times we held our hands,
The times we crossed the lands,
The times we danced into the night.
The times we shared together,
In our eyes forever,
We held each other tight.
Never long enough,
Always deserved more love,
These times we could ignite.
Stepping stones now,
Showing us how,
The times will be so bright.
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Thats really good Bryce...did you just whip that together?
Sort of. Took me a few hours spread over a couple weeks. For some reason, I do my best thinking while *cough* on the "pot", so I had a notebook I would jot ideas and lines down.
This one was actually rather structured. I had an idea of what I wanted to write about, came up with the ideas of 3 verses and a chorus (the little "interlude" came out later). Just one line thoughts really, something like this:
1. Good times with hint of bad
2. Bad times with hint of good
3. Great times
Chorus thought was "good not great, deserve great".
From there, I actually modeled an old Men At Work song (*love* that band) to give me a poetic structure. It was basically:
long sentence 1
short sentence 2
long sentence 1
short sentence 2
(where 1 rhymes with 1, etc).
Then I started just brainstorming ideas that matched the general thoughts for each verse. I've got a list of things that I thought were "good times". With that list, I came up with a good one-liner, something that would match the idea from the brainlist, and then would use that word to find a rhyming word that matched another idea from the list.
For example, the first line is "Days of sunshine and nights of rain." Expressed the idea that we had good days and bad days. I liked it. Then I started thinking what rhymes with "rain". I had "strain", "gain", and then remembered "train". One of my ideas was the time spent on a train, so I came up with "We shared our warmth on that old train."
I did that for all 3 verses, jotted down ideas, came up with a one-liner that matched the idea, then came up with a rhyming version.
For the chorus, it follows the pattern:
short sentence 1,
short sentence 1,
long sentence 2,
short sentence 3,
short sentence 3,
long sentence 2.
(1 rhymes with 1, etc).
And I had it follow the general thought that we had good times, clouded by bad times, and future will be greater times.
Anyways, that was probably a LOT more info than you wanted, but there you have it ;)
-BKN
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